Title: The first ride, makes all the difference!
Topic: Encourage people who are afraid of flying to overcome their anxieties,
just as they did when they were younger and afraid of riding a carousel.
Purpose Statement: To inform listeners about the various ways my ad (The first ride, makes all the difference) has a negative correlation instead of a positive one.
Thesis Statement (Argument): While this
airline is trying to comfort it’s audiences by reassuring
that everything will be okay if you ride with us, the image used is dark, scary and not portraying that message at all. Kids
are not usually frightened by carousels, but this produces fear due to the
dark/gloomy contrast, plus the kid looks terrified.
Introduction
Audience attention grabber (TBD), Thesis, Preview
Audience attention grabber (TBD), Thesis, Preview
Main point: The visual image is not
representing the point this ad is trying to make.
A. Sub-point: Dark/Gloomy
B. Sub-point: Frightening facial expressions
C. Sub-point: Comparison of Child and Carousel to Adults and flying
B. Sub-point: Frightening facial expressions
C. Sub-point: Comparison of Child and Carousel to Adults and flying
1. Supporting point: Language and Themes
2. Supporting point: Wording
2. Supporting point: Wording
Conclusion
Don’t scare your audience, match the idea with the representation.
Don’t scare your audience, match the idea with the representation.
Credibility & References
Looks good so far! It might help to add the names of the devices that you'll be talking about in your outline so if you forget you'll be able to see it easily. Also transitions!
ReplyDeleteI would have to agree with Chassety! I know sometimes I forget things and sometimes it just helps to see the name of the word to get you back on track, it would also help the grader remain on subject with you and help if needed
ReplyDeleteI think that you could add the terminology for the devices before saying what they are about, that would help me at least to make sure that I didn't forget what I was talking about (the goal is to put on the outline only things you might forget and I feel like terminology could be party of that). I think you might also want to cut down on putting your whole thesis on the outline, it might prompt you to read it of the page instead go just talking to your audience.
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