Thesis
Satisfactory not outstanding
Pushy rather than focusing on the power of product
Overview
first covering pushy elements then my suggested focus
Pushy Elements
Emphatic: enumeratio
Not needed.
Understatement: litotes
more on their product
Emphatic: diacope
This is a very aggressive slogan.
comes off too hard
Focus Elements
Arrangement: Climax
Good story… go on
Exaggeration: hyperbole
Again with the story!
Substitution
Set them apart from competition.
Appearance
Style: All Caps
Center?
Family: Serif
Decent
X-Height
Good change.
Conclusion
Overall not terrible
Better focus
Dakota has a lot in the outline. I didn't see an Intro section unless she will have it practiced for her full speech. Her conclusion does wrap up what her point is her ad. She may run out of time it looks like there is much to cover. I think she could find some info about this product, maybe the demographics and a group the company's trying to target.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way Dakota chose to organize her Outline regarding when to talk about the different devices- pretty smart. I realized thanks to Denise's comment that Dakota didn't put an intro, and I also realized I didn't either, so we both need to add those. I think she will have a fulfilling presentation that will turn out to be not too long, but also not too short. I am also curious on who she thinks the target audience is?
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